高分作文標志
1：是否長短句交叉;
2、是否會使用插入語;
3、用詞是否多樣，準確，形象，盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞;
4、關鍵詞是否換用，切勿老用重復詞;
5、句型使用是否準確、地道。
下面給出寫好一篇作文的注意事項：
1.適當用被動替換主動，這樣能更客觀的反映事實,句子開頭不要總是用we/I(比如寫結(jié)尾時不用weshouldpay attention to而用Attention should be paidto.)舉個經(jīng)典結(jié)尾2004年六月六級作文的最后一段：Itis,therefore, high time that some applicable approacheswereimplemented by the service industry like that. Bydoingso，its competitive edge will be sharpenedeffectively.
2.善于使用插入語，比如說把副詞、連接詞等，作插入語放在中間，一般放在主語、動詞或者助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。
如however / therefore /forexample/Ibelieve做插入語放在中間，一般放在動詞，助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。
比如說：Otherindividuals, however, take the attitude that …
3.一定要學會換詞，換形象，具體的替換太寬泛的。(考試中一般不要出現(xiàn)good,bad, many, thing, think,
people,opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable替換proper,approaches替換ways,implement替換carryout, sharpen one’scompetitiveedge替換enhanceone’scompetitiveness(提高某物競爭力)
下面舉一篇南京工程學院某位同學寫的優(yōu)秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何運用各類寫作技巧的。這位同學把老師上課講的各類寫作手法和精彩替換和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。
Computer and I ( By Simmy )
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling daywhenmy mother bought me a computer as birthday present, whichexerted atremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself ingooglingan army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy asea ofmelodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feelingthatthe whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly 替換 very
thrilling 替換 exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination onsb替換 sb. be interested in sth.
google 替換 search
an army of 替換 a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessedtheincreasing popularity of computers. Coincident with theadvancementof science and technology, computers pouring into thecurrentsociety as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals.It is noexaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, inlargemeasure!
The dawn of the new centurywitnessed是一個精彩句型，用來描述在某個時期發(fā)生了什么事情;Increasingpopularity替換 more and more popular
Coincident with…非常地道的句型，表達“與…一致”的意思，替換With…
Advancement 替換 development
Pour into ( flood into / swarminto)替換 enter into
Current ( currently )替換 now
Appeal to sb. 替換 sb. beinterestedin sth.
Growing individuals 替換 moreandmore people
It is no exaggeration tosay經(jīng)典句型，說某事是毫不夸張的
For a start, we can, freely, searchdesiredinformation at any moment . Little by little, our knowledgewill bewell enriched, and our horizons will be greatlybroadened.Additionally, we can get huge recreations online bychatting,playing games, or delivering email.
For a start 替換 To begin with
We can, freely,search用了插入語的寫作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched, andourhorizons will be greatlybroadened.用了非常精彩的被動
Additionally 替換 In addition/Besides
Deliver 替換 send
There is no denying that , however, computerscann in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especiallythegrowing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging onthescreen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
There is no denying that , however, computerscann in the disservice of humanbeings,這個句子有三個精彩之處，首先Thereisnodenyingthat這個句型，還有however作為插入語，nin the disservice of 替換 do harm to
Emerging 替換 appearing (fading替換 disappearing )
Netcitizen網(wǎng)民，屬于精彩用詞
As a classic proverb goes that no garden hasnoweeds. Computers do play a positive role in the developmentofpeople lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. Weshould,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid theoppositefacet.
No garden has no weeds 替換Everycoin has two sides
Computers do play，do強調(diào)
Positive 替換 important /good等
A slice of 替換 a part of
Unfavorable 替換 bad
Impacts 替換 effects/influences
We should, therefore, take advantage of…使用插入語
Fruits(而且fruits用的非常形象，merits/virtues) 替換 advantage ( defects替換disadvantage ) Facet 替換aspect
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